The Dead Woman Poem #1: A Thursday Poet Rally Poem After All

Hats off to BigTentPoetry who got me started on this path of Dead Man poetry. Naturally I had to write from the feminine perspective. I am sure the father of Dad Man Poetry,  Marvin Bell, won't mind. I am not submitting this for the Big Tent prompt though (I have a second in the works) and am electing to use this, instead, for the Thursday Poet's Rally.

The Dead Woman Poem #1

The dead woman does not grumble when traffic seems to stretch
the distance between her car and her destination.
She rises above the car, the traffic, the grumbling.
She uses the windshields as stepping stones, equal
opportunity Toyota Corolla, Ford Escape, ironic Escalade Hybrid
of glistening garnet red.
The dead woman looks into the faces of the mother and
daughter, ripe from Christmas Shopping.
The Daughter squirms in her seat: bored, listless, filled
with questions she is afraid to ask.
The Mother hears dialogue in her head of disappointments
and dreams unfulfilled until
her mind contorts into prayer, shouting silently to
whatever God will listen.
The dead woman speaks a silent prayer aloud that
only Divinity hears.
The daughter looks into the eyes of the Dead Woman,
seeing her silence in the dark night.

Comments

[meirozavian]

Brilliant idea Jul, beautiful words. I LIKE IT.

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Wiah-- I love the juxtaposition of these characters!

[Scent of my heart]

Nice story in words! Perfect Rally contribution! Thanks for the visit to my blog! Happy holidays!

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[kim Nelson]

Oh! I like this! I am my worst person when driving and in traffic. I will remember this piece the next time I see my own "dead woman" coming out. Great bit of writing!

[Harshika]

why such a dark choice of topic? :(

nice write :)

[Gemma @ Greyscale]

This poem has dramatic guts, right to the last bristly line! Powerful!

[Brennan Bogert]

I like the anonymity of the "dead woman" it seems more fitting and descripitive to call her that rather than "she" "her" "the mother." It's a great poem.