The Dead Woman Poem #1: A Thursday Poet Rally Poem After All

Hats off to BigTentPoetry who got me started on this path of Dead Man poetry. Naturally I had to write from the feminine perspective. I am sure the father of Dad Man Poetry,  Marvin Bell, won't mind. I am not submitting this for the Big Tent prompt though (I have a second in the works) and am electing to use this, instead, for the Thursday Poet's Rally.

The Dead Woman Poem #1

The dead woman does not grumble when traffic seems to stretch
the distance between her car and her destination.
She rises above the car, the traffic, the grumbling.
She uses the windshields as stepping stones, equal
opportunity Toyota Corolla, Ford Escape, ironic Escalade Hybrid
of glistening garnet red.
The dead woman looks into the faces of the mother and
daughter, ripe from Christmas Shopping.
The Daughter squirms in her seat: bored, listless, filled
with questions she is afraid to ask.
The Mother hears dialogue in her head of disappointments
and dreams unfulfilled until
her mind contorts into prayer, shouting silently to
whatever God will listen.
The dead woman speaks a silent prayer aloud that
only Divinity hears.
The daughter looks into the eyes of the Dead Woman,
seeing her silence in the dark night.

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[Joseph Harker]

Glad that you took it on as a "dead woman" prompt... I wanted to do something besides "man", but played it safe. Love the way you also zoom in and out from the details to the bigger picture, it adds a lot of reality to it.

Sidebar: a friend of mine has gone home to Bakersfield for the holidays! I'll tell her to stop by your Visible Poetics opening. :)

[SeaGlass]

This is quite interesting- I like how there's almost a touch of humour which turns into pathos by the time you've finished. There's some good use of language here, which you should definitely keep working at and developing.

[debi]

Julie,

I like the pictures you created in my head.
Then you played with my mood, taking me from humor to almost desolation.

[Pat Cegan]

So glad you visited me so I can now visit you. Looking forward to reading much more of your very powerful and thought provoking poetry! hugs, pat

[Cloaked Monk]

I enjoyed the melanchy.

Shalom.

[Cloaked Monk]

Apparently I don't enjoy typing! I meant melancholy.

Thanks.

[Heather Grace Stewart]

You really evoked a melancholy mood here--well done.

[Thoughts Not Lost]

Beauty in its sad subject matter. Vivid images. Amazing words!

[WordsWorthMillions]

I found the picture of the dead woman flying over very fascinating. You have done a good job with the story, words and images.

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