A-ha: What do you have to tell me? (A Pantoum)

Continuing from yesterday’s thread.. I knew a pantoum would open new awareness free verse would leave untouched. I tucked in a bit of a prompt from Keith’s ramblings and Carry On Tuesday, but I think I will save that one for later in the day. This a-ha has created a life of its own… a very necessary life of its own.

 

While I have you fear, you are not me.

I am not you. Though if you were i'd slice you

cut you unstitch you and examen you

the scar you left behind, the life birthed

 

I am not you, though if you were i'd slice you

fear: sticky red gooey tar, sucking my hope

the scar you left behind the life birthed

from the spot after I burned myself free

 

Fear: sticky red gooey tar, sucking my hope

I take judgment off your glue and look, just look

From the spot after I burned myself free

The core is the same? The core is the same - the same

 

I take judgment off your glue and look, jsut look

love: i've lost count of the numbered site - it's you?

The core is the same? The core is the same - the same

White, waiting - wistful fresh-after-rain-morning

 

love: i've lost count of the numbered site - it's you?

Breath lost at first touch of toe to dewy grass

White, waiting - wistful fresh-after-rain-morning

Knees buckled by laughing tears, "Hello!!"

Breath lost at first touch of toe to dewy grass

cut you unstitch you and examen you

Knees buckled by laughing tears, "Hello!!"

While I have you fear, you are not me.

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Comments

[Kristie (Just Me)]

Very interesting and I loved it.

"While I have you fear, you are not me."

This is my favorite line. Even though all of us have fear how true it is that we are not fear itself. Awesome poem!

[Mary]

Very impressive work!

[Jingle]

I am not you,
but I believe in you,
I am like you here...

love your style!
:)

[Paul Andrew Russell]

I agree, this is a great line..

'While I have you fear, you are not me.'

Excellent writing.