Beyond Words Beautiful (Poem from today's Three Word Wednesday Prompt)

Today on Three Word Wednesday we were given three words:

Acrid, Bane, Tepid

 

At first I thought, “What on Earth can I do with these words?” The first line just flowed onto the page and it felt as if the rest of it was destiny.

 

Thanks, Thom, for introducing me to these two characters and their lives, which are perhaps more like the average person’s life than we really now.

 

 

Her name was Acrid

Her coarse red hair sliced her lovers

Before they could feel her skin

"Stand back" her scent ordered

Yet there was something in her pungent

Flavor that aroused those certain

Boys, that caused them to flail,

helplessly, as her lengthy russet

tresses drew blood and her breasts

waited, untouched, wanting, pure

 

His name was Bane

Acrid was his aim

He brought a scythe and wore a hood

He crushed her shivering mane

and silenced her skin's crys

for touch and in those stolen

few moments, they felt, together

what bliss was like

 

Until that moment when Bane's destruction

combined with Acrid's bitter aftertaste

they became tepid, together

just another suburban couple

looking for some form of satisfaction

in SUV's and little league and bunco

and the occasional Parent-Teacher conference

at night, especially, they wondered

if that brief memory actually happened

when Bane and Acrid were beyond

words beautiful

 

Comments

[Tony Noland]

This was a potent way to use these three words!

[lissa]

quite a fairytale-like poem, the modern day touches throws me off a bit but then when I re-read, it doesn't seem so - like any relationships, it eventually has to come down to earth

[ThomG]

Wonderfully done. This built gloriously, and the yearning in the end is fitting.

[kathi wright]

loved this julie - it captured the heat and fervor of early love, morphing into the everyday. the photo was a beauty, too. thanks, kathi

[Britt Nielsen]

Wow, so creative and vivid. I love the fairy tale with a modern twist!

[Anthony North]

Yes, a definite fairy tale feel to this. Nice one.

[Divaa D]

whaoooo--- a fairy tale told :)

[Jeeves]

Wow!!Such lovely usage of words

[Toi]

Oh, what a wonderful fairy-tale-like story.
A magic-realism feel to this. Would love to
see this poem illustrated.

[Sandy Coleman]

Oh, my. Amazing what you can get out of 3 words. This is so intriguing right from the start. I have been to visit you in awhile. You've redone the blog's look. I like it a lot. Good for you. And thanks for visiting today with such very kind words. You are such a great writer, so I'm honored.

And I love Zumba. I own a set of Zumba tapes. So much fun at home, but much better when you do it in a group. Take care.