This week's prompt from Big Tent Poetry is a Wordle -
I resent the reality
I am the only one left
To buy the milk the eggs the bread
To balance the checkbook to put gas
In the car to weed the flower beds
To to to to no longer two
When I am hungry
When I need to be touched
When it is dark
Or is dangerous
Or I cough into the silence
Due to the dullness which
Just happens to surround me
Don’t bother to even suggest
What happens when there
Is a praise to sing and I do
So solo
Somehow, finally, one night
I looked up to my night companions
Silently winking and nodding
At me, affirming my choices
And I heard them, that night
And felt strange comfort
And stopped resenting the reality
Because usually it feels satisfying
To be responsible to only the
Stars and Me
Your resentment was heard well...I liked your listing of the day-to-day chores rapidly being fired, and brilliant with seemingly catching your breath - the "To to to to no longer two" line.
I also like that you slowed it down and reassessed your position a bit...
"Silently winking and nodding
At me, affirming my choices"
Great wording there. Did you use all of the words? Perusing again, it seems you have. Show off!
- Dina
Posted by: Dina Spice | June 17, 2010 at 07:24 PM
Julie
This is a beautiful piece and I love the fact that you went in a full circle here realizing your choices were right!
Pamela
Posted by: pamela | June 18, 2010 at 08:42 AM
Julie, Stunning piece. It's very effective when you go from the list of things to do to, to to to to to no longer two.
Like Pamela I like that you went full circle. ~Brenda
Posted by: brenda w | June 18, 2010 at 08:54 AM
Julie, Stunning piece. It's very effective when you go from the list of things to do to, to to to to to no longer two.
Like Pamela I like that you went full circle. ~Brenda
Posted by: brenda w | June 18, 2010 at 08:54 AM
Very well done, your use of the words in the prompt. The "To to to to no longer two" line was an effective use of sound with those heterographs. I also love the rapid-fire lines, and your honesty within them.
-Nicole
Posted by: Nicole Nicholson | June 18, 2010 at 09:29 AM
the energy in this is really great. though it ends up being an acceptance, there's an edge to it.
and i love the photo with it!
Posted by: carolee | June 18, 2010 at 02:17 PM
I like your take on these words - and the change the narrator goes through in the poem.
Posted by: Mr. Walker | June 18, 2010 at 03:32 PM
This is a great poem. I love the line:
To to to to no longer two
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Posted by: Tilly Bud | June 19, 2010 at 12:36 AM
Oops! I c+p the url of another blog for my list and forgot to change it.
That last one was from me
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Posted by: Tilly Bud | June 19, 2010 at 12:37 AM
I liked the tone, too, and the word play, realities. "I looked up to my night companions/ Silently winking and nodding" is where I felt the shift -- loved the idea of the stars counseling. Of taking twinkling into new territory.
Posted by: Deb | June 19, 2010 at 10:09 AM