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June 17, 2010

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Dina Spice

Your resentment was heard well...I liked your listing of the day-to-day chores rapidly being fired, and brilliant with seemingly catching your breath - the "To to to to no longer two" line.

I also like that you slowed it down and reassessed your position a bit...

"Silently winking and nodding
At me, affirming my choices"

Great wording there. Did you use all of the words? Perusing again, it seems you have. Show off!

- Dina



pamela

Julie
This is a beautiful piece and I love the fact that you went in a full circle here realizing your choices were right!
Pamela

brenda w

Julie, Stunning piece. It's very effective when you go from the list of things to do to, to to to to to no longer two.

Like Pamela I like that you went full circle. ~Brenda

brenda w

Julie, Stunning piece. It's very effective when you go from the list of things to do to, to to to to to no longer two.

Like Pamela I like that you went full circle. ~Brenda

Nicole Nicholson

Very well done, your use of the words in the prompt. The "To to to to no longer two" line was an effective use of sound with those heterographs. I also love the rapid-fire lines, and your honesty within them.

-Nicole

carolee

the energy in this is really great. though it ends up being an acceptance, there's an edge to it.

and i love the photo with it!

Mr. Walker

I like your take on these words - and the change the narrator goes through in the poem.

Tilly Bud

This is a great poem. I love the line:

To to to to no longer two

http://poemsaboutnothinginparticular.blogspot.com/

Tilly Bud

Oops! I c+p the url of another blog for my list and forgot to change it.

That last one was from me

http://thelaughinghousewife.wordpress.com

Deb

I liked the tone, too, and the word play, realities. "I looked up to my night companions/ Silently winking and nodding" is where I felt the shift -- loved the idea of the stars counseling. Of taking twinkling into new territory.

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