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February 25, 2010

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Paul Oakley

I love the physicality of this, Julie.

Where by skin and in skin and with skin
Alone we are adored, cuddled, held...

The life we have to live and love is embodied and encultured. I lovw this!

Therese Broderick

Yes, this poem is true for me at least: since birth I have somehow wanted to return to that paradise of being innocent, beloved, safe, adored, with no effort required of me. A feeling of "longing" for the perfect Eden of the womb, before knowledge of sin. Well-done.

Nicole Nicholson

This is beautiful -- and I have to admit, this reminds me of one of my own beliefs: that underneath the skin, underneath the differences, we are all looking for the same things. Thank you for sharing.

-Nicole

Anthony North

It is often so difficult to be in, and come to terms with so much.
Great words.

Joseph Harker

Aside from being a thoughtful and wistful piece, I just want to point out something about the structure: I really liked the triads. In several of the lines, there's this "X, and Y, and Z" pattern that I find really... complete? Comforting? I don't know. It fits well, though. ^_^

irene

Otherwise remarkably universal tags

Forever stamped with a longing to return

You are writing about Adam & Eve. I love your poem. Julie, it's beautiful.

rob kistner

"Forever stamped with a longing to return
To some form of uncovered transparency"

That's what I try to explain to my wife when she complains about my relaxing in my Joe Boxer's... ;)

Nice work Julie!
...rob

Moonfall

DJ Vorreyer

Where by skin and in skin and with skin

Alone we are adored

Very nice.

wayne

nicely done...forever stamped and universal indeed

Karen

"Forever stamped with a longing to return

To some form of uncovered transparency

Where by skin and in skin and with skin

Alone we are adored, cuddled, held in"


You've articulated something I think many of us do long for. Really nice!

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