With Universal Tags - Get Your Poem On #115

The prompt this week from ReadWritePoem was a powerful one, and one which took a respectable time of introspection surrounding the theme of what I believe and what I don't believe. I wrote about my process on my Julie Unplugged blog . I thought it would be simple yet, it wasn't so simple. It might be worth your while to do the exercise even if you aren't interested in writing a poem from it.

 

I over wrote this poem at first and then settled in with just what I share, here. Shorter than my usual, perhaps – and I think it is just right.

 

Born naked, belonging, identical uniforms

Him with this, her with that, them with –

Otherwise remarkably universal tags

Forever stamped with a longing to return

To some form of uncovered transparency

Where by skin and in skin and with skin

Alone we are adored, cuddled, held in

Agreement with wide-eyed, sacred believing

Disbelief just because we are – nothing to do

Mirror face blinks, moist eyed, relieved

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Comments

[Paul Oakley]

I love the physicality of this, Julie.

Where by skin and in skin and with skin
Alone we are adored, cuddled, held...

The life we have to live and love is embodied and encultured. I lovw this!

[Therese Broderick]

Yes, this poem is true for me at least: since birth I have somehow wanted to return to that paradise of being innocent, beloved, safe, adored, with no effort required of me. A feeling of "longing" for the perfect Eden of the womb, before knowledge of sin. Well-done.

[Nicole Nicholson]

This is beautiful -- and I have to admit, this reminds me of one of my own beliefs: that underneath the skin, underneath the differences, we are all looking for the same things. Thank you for sharing.

-Nicole

[Anthony North]

It is often so difficult to be in, and come to terms with so much.
Great words.

[Joseph Harker]

Aside from being a thoughtful and wistful piece, I just want to point out something about the structure: I really liked the triads. In several of the lines, there's this "X, and Y, and Z" pattern that I find really... complete? Comforting? I don't know. It fits well, though. ^_^

[irene]

Otherwise remarkably universal tags

Forever stamped with a longing to return

You are writing about Adam & Eve. I love your poem. Julie, it's beautiful.

[rob kistner]

"Forever stamped with a longing to return
To some form of uncovered transparency"

That's what I try to explain to my wife when she complains about my relaxing in my Joe Boxer's... ;)

Nice work Julie!
...rob

Moonfall

[DJ Vorreyer]

Where by skin and in skin and with skin

Alone we are adored

Very nice.

[wayne]

nicely done...forever stamped and universal indeed

[Karen]

"Forever stamped with a longing to return

To some form of uncovered transparency

Where by skin and in skin and with skin

Alone we are adored, cuddled, held in"

You've articulated something I think many of us do long for. Really nice!

[Tumblewords]

A delicate sense of powerful yearning - a wonderful read.

[pamela]

Julie,
This is a lovely poem and i so enjoyed reading it. I especially enjoyed this line:
"Forever stamped with a longing to return"

Thanks for sharing!
Pamela

[Neil Reid]

Am I permitted to say I like this poem without explaining why? I do. In a way it feels familiar, comfortable, like an old well worn glove, something you know, just because. Thank you Julie.

[Erin]

I love the idea of naked uniforms and universal tags!