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September 30, 2009

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Donald Harbour

Now, that is a mind full of past, pain, and penance. The soul of a poet is a pleasing pasture with occasional stones (some would say a hidden bottomless abyss too). I believe this poem has presented a great deal of them that are a part of the human existance. I very much enjoyed your words. Good interpretation of he photo.
Regards,
DH

Mark

Plastic people evincing such human, so very human thoughts and feelings.

Universal and hauntingly well written. I can see similar thoughts being thought by a passenger on a subway or bus...

I also very much enjoyed your poem.

Paul Oakley

You've captured something important here, Julie.

seeing your scar and feeling
my scar and being unable to move
to you is more precarious than I knew

I like the "testimony of the scar" and your interpretation of the fact that both figures have it. Nicely done.
_____

Paul Oakley
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David Moolten

I really like the word "conjoined" and the "testimony of the scar" that follows. Your perspective is both very touching and indicting. The ending is bold but deserved by the build up of anguish in the speaker by his/her situation. Strong.

Cynthia Short

Wow, you took something very actual and real (the plastic foosball players) and turned them into something even more real - feelings, wants, desires. The last line wrapped it up perfectly.

DJ Vorreyer

I like "I hear you in the steel" - something very intriguing about that.

Tumblewords

Surely, it must be hell. Provocative piece.

wayne

powerful...and well done....thanks for sharing

gautami tripathy

You are so right. Both are poems kind of reflect each other. However, I like yours better. Much much better.

Julie Jordan Scott

I am so grateful to read your responses to my poem. This prompt engaged me throughout the week so when these words were born... it reminded me of giving birth to my children.

Thank you, so much, each and all of you.

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