Poem: Show Yourself

For the third week in a row, I haven't written the ReadWritePoem "Get Your Poem On" poem until Thursday, the day we are supposed to post our links for the world to see. Last week, I don't think I got it done until Friday and the week before I never got it done.

Interesting to view my process. I have been collecting words with the "OH" vowel sound since before Monday, yet - - flat until this piece bubbled up and amused me by being "OH" flavored with a definite tang of "EEE" as well.

Reminds me of the way I like to make my Arnold Palmers. :-)

Enjoy this attempt - and visit the ReadWritePoem website.

 

Poem: show yourself
Open your foolish
Swirls of oceanic
Sea orchards onto
my page
my pen
waits

Ogling blue green
word tentacles
remote obstacles
gripping my oomph

I take a gulp
of breath that
"ohhhhhhhhhh"
becomes a silent
screeching Nooooooo
Let me goooooo

I don't know
how to breathe
this far below
the surface of
the page

Poem: show yourself
Open to me

Foolish, I am to throw
The hope for my soul
in so many odes
to the poem ogre

Poem: Please
Open: Show
Don't let me
or ths

Go

 

Comments

[Donald Harbour]

Well now, it would seem that which you never got done has been done, indeed. Nice way to turn writers block in upon itself. I enjoyed this.

[DJ Vorreyer]

I don't know
how to breathe
this far below
the surface of
the page

is my favorite part. The rest of the poem is playful with sounds and language in a way I enjoyed.

[Nathan]

I really like the metaphor of being submerged in the page.